Wednesday, August 1, 2012

Watering Places


Here are your waters and your watering place
Drink and be whole again beyond confusion
-Directive

I.
“Go on, sure… see if the old tin cup’s still there—“
Awaiting no further permission, we cousins dash down the path,
balance across the beam of the concrete holding back the little reservoir,
bend uphill and race to the river (a stream really),
scamper across moss-slick stones
to the thin locust, wrinkled so prematurely it was-- is-- ageless.

The tree hid our treasure- the tin cup
I imagined to be like Benny’s of the Boxcar Children
tied by a string to the limb by our late grandmother
within reach of the continuously refreshed pools
free of collected pollen or building muck
water clear through to stones and only a few leaves.

Here, we were allowed to drink from the ground
Here, we knew the source of the stream
Here, my father had ‘always drunk this water without a problem’
so we would too.
And always, it was delicious.
So sweet, so cold
I’d feel I should ask for forgiveness.

II.
“Grab the other empty glass jars.  Let’s go—“
(Alone in 7-mile cabin in the middle of the woods,
even after working outdoors all day, sometimes
one of the other of us would have the urge to get outside again
for a different physical contact than setting up poles or nets or watching the sun rise.
I might lie on a log across the stream, he would often stride up the hillside
and on this night, the cloudless moon beckoned, and he remembered
the spring he had seen
on the topo map. )

He set off with glass jars and no flashlight, not checking to see if I was behind him
And I strode quickly through the already-wet tall grass to catch up
We hopped across the stream, then scrambled up to the dirt road
Our shoes suddenly harsh on the gravel
I followed his sometimes-veering, sometimes pausing, direction,
sensed without a dowsing rod but with memory of maps
until he bent over a puddle in the grass

Not a bubble, but a seep, still—
The water was clear with a film of mud at the bottom and grass thick along the side

Without pause, he lay on his belly and put his face in the pool. Lapped up the water.
I didn’t want to get all wet.  But then, I couldn’t resist
stretching along the damp grass to douse my face in that pool
and drink.

III.
“Oh!  Look up!  There are stars- up above”
the clouds have cleared
so I can see the trail to guide my friends
the ones who urge me always to look up, look out, and see
I lead them to the river
tell tales of tin cups
and drinking from the ground 

Now the cup lost its hold on the string
and a sturdy log bridge crosses the stream
but the water still pools
between moss covered rocks
and my friend dips her tin bottle
and drinks – delicious

we smile knowingly
straight from the source




(Note: Ok, this was rushed at the end since the silly buzzer was sounding.  I need to go back to it- but ideas for the end would be particularly useful!)

2 comments:

  1. Love the reference to Benny's cup -- I know exactly what you are talking about!

    Do you want the reader to have any idea who the "he" is in the second part? I thought it might be your father since you had just mentioned him, so that idea was in my mind as I was reading.

    As for the end...I wonder if it would be more powerful coming from your own perspective. Your friend may think the water is delicious, but since you are the thread running through this poem I'd like to know more about your experience at the end.

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  2. More edits during Writing Time today :-)


    Watering Places

    Here are your waters and your watering place
    Drink and be whole again beyond confusion
    -Directive

    I.
    “Go on, sure… see if the old tin cup’s still there—“
    Awaiting no further permission, we cousins dash down the path,
    balance across the beam of the concrete holding back the little reservoir,
    bend uphill and race to the river (a stream really),
    scamper across moss-slick stones
    to the thin locust, wrinkled so prematurely that it was-- is-- ageless.

    The tree hid our treasure- the tin cup
    I imagined to be like Benny’s of the Boxcar Children
    strung to a limb by our late grandmother
    within reach of the continuously refreshed pools
    free of collected pollen or settling flakes of mud
    water clear to stones

    Here, we were allowed to drink from the ground
    Here, we knew the source of the stream
    Here, my father had ‘always drunk this water without a problem’
    so we would too.
    And always, it was delicious.
    So sweet, so cold
    I’d feel I should ask for forgiveness.

    II.
    “Grab the other empty glass jars. Let’s go—“
    Me and he were grown-up, independent, living close to the land
    one firm mattress on the floor in 7-Mile Cabin
    this night, the cloudless moon beckoned, and he remembered
    the spring he had seen
    on the topo map

    He set off with glass jars and no flashlight, not checking to see if I was behind him
    But I was, with more glass jars
    and I strode quickly through the already-dewed tall grass to catch up
    We hopped across the stream, then scrambled up to the dirt road
    Our shoes suddenly harsh on the gravel
    I followed his sometimes-veering, sometimes pausing, direction,
    sensed without a dowsing rod but with memory of maps
    until he bent over a puddle in the grass

    Not a bubbling spring, but a seep, still—
    The water was clear with a film of mud at the bottom and grass thick along the side

    Without pause, he lay on his belly and put his face in the pool. Lapped up the water.
    I didn’t want to wet my entire front. But then, I couldn’t resist
    stretching along the damp grass to douse my face in that pool
    and drink.

    III.
    “Oh! Look up! There are stars- up above”
    the clouds have cleared
    so I can see the trail to guide my friends
    (the ones who urge me always to look up, look out, and see)

    I lead them to the river
    tell tales of tin cups
    now the cup lost its hold on the string
    and a sturdier log bridge crosses the stream
    but the water still keeps clear in the pools
    between moss covered rocks

    I still dip and drink,
    then share the cup of cool clarity
    circling from the source

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